Hello Readers!
During lock-down I have been writing a story about a panda who discovers a red and white bus. This is activity I choose from the lock-down activities my teacher set my class. I got inspiration from a image of a bus that is red in white covered in green leaves. At first I wasn't really sure what I should write about but then I thought of my favourite animal discovering a bus. So that is why my story is about a panda finding a bus. It took me a long time to find the perfect name for this panda, in the end I decided to name the panda Bai Yun which means white cloud in Chinese and is named after a famous female panda.
If the red and white bus was your inspiration, what would you write about?
My inspiration:
Bai Yun the explorer πΌ
One dreamy breezy day a young fierce furry female panda was released to the wild. This young chap is named Bai Yun which means white cloud in Chinese, Yun (cloud) for short. Yun loves exploring everything one day when Bai Yun was out with her mother she was observing the different bamboos in the forest. She got inspired and wrote a whole story about the difference between all of the bamboo's sizes and shapes.
On this breezy day Yun was exploring and suddenly noticed a dazzling lingering trail. But what Bai Yun didn’t know was that there are multiple obstacles throughout the trail. As she starts wandering through the trail she suddenly sees the first obstacle but she doesn’t stop she keeps going. The first obstacle hurdles but there is a twist, you have to jump over all of the hurdles in one minute.
Bai Yun begins the obstacle and feels very hysterical and thinks she won’t be able to finish the obstacle on time. 30 seconds later, Yun has gone through half of the hurdles. She now feels more confident in herself and in 50 seconds she manages to go through all of the hurdles. Five minutes later… Yun comes across the next obstacle. This obstacle seems to be very exotic to yun, because it is a puzzle that you have to solve and she loves to do puzzles and put pieces together.
This obstacle was the last one but this obstacle was not easy, Yun is very good at solving puzzles but this puzzle isn’t like any other puzzle. To be able to solve this puzzle you have to work out a riddle. Bai Yun thought this would be as hard as a rock. The riddle was easier than she thought. You only had to unscramble the letters to create a sentence; it was as easy as buttering toast. As Bai Yun initiated the actual puzzle she felt tormented about what was going to happen when she reaches the end of the trail.
Finally, Yun consummates the trail and discovers this interesting long red and white thing on wheels that she has never seen before. Bai Yun suddenly gets the urge to go into this thing that she has never seen before. As she wanders into the thing she sees a sign saying bus so now she found out that this thing is a bus. Inside of this bus, there is a comfy bed that has very soft and snug pillows. However, this bus isn’t just a normal bus, this bus has been here for thirteen years.
Many people would believe that this is just a bus abandoned but it is a part of history. Bai Yun thinks that this bus is extremely precious and has made herself at home. Especially since it has everything you need to survive even an aggregate pantry of food. At the end of the day, Bai Yun was very ecstatic about what she had found and that she went down the trail.
Hello Jordan. It's me Venice from Hornby High School.
ReplyDeleteYour story sounds very interesting. It makes me curious if there will be a part 2 that resumes to what Bai yun does with the bus. I have never thought of a panda that can be able to write a journal. Is it a different world that has fantasy beings or is the panda just smart? The name of your main character reminds of the giant panda Bai Yun. Is this where the name came from? As for your question in this blog post, I have already started a story inspired by the bus image. Though I can't tell you much about it you can check on my blog once I have finished writing it. Anyways great job writing a great story. Keep up the great work. I hope to read more of your stories.
- Venice
Hello Venice. It's Jordan here from HHS.
DeleteThank you for commenting on my blog post. Yes Bai Yun is named after the giant panda. I think the panda is in a fantasy world. I hope to see some writing from you so I can comment on your blog.
-Jordan
Hi Jordan
ReplyDeleteYou are such a great writer, and you have such a good imagination. This story is amazing, and I agree with Venice, you should definitely write a Part 2 to continue your story. I would love to hear what Yun does next!
You have used a great range of interesting words here, just be careful not to overdo it, because sometimes a simple or more common word can be better (e.g. rather than saying "Yun consummates the trail" it would have been better to say "Yun completes the trail").
I look forward to the next instalment!
- Mr MItchell
Hello Mr Mitchell, thank you for commenting. I will try not overwork myself. I am currently writing a part two and I'm sure you will enjoy it. I hope to see more of your comments.
Delete-Jordan
Yes, that is a really important message about not overworking yourself. You are such a great student that you run the risk of pushing yourself too hard. (Ask Nadia about a conversation that Mrs Tafau and I had with her about this earlier this year). Don't forget to find some time to relax and enjoy the beautiful weather we're having. The forecast for the next 2 days is sunny and 19 degrees, so take a break and enjoy the "here and now". I'm sure your Part Two will still be up there in your brain when you get around to finishing it! Have a great weekend!
Delete- Mr Mitchell